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After the Black War, most of the earth has been rendered useless. Farms, villages, and townships no longer exist. Only autonomous mega-cities with populations of twenty million or more.
In the city of Ephax, VICTORIA NICKELS (17) is a Fifth Year student at the School of the Elite. If she passes the final exam, she’ll become an Elite and live in the lap of luxury for the rest of her life. But to pass the exam, she must inject a lower class citizen with Drought, a drug which transfers the victim’s life force to an Elite citizen, whose signs of aging will be permanently erased.
Instead of dispensing the toxin, Victoria allows the victim to escape, but is forced to join the failed students and become a Sabike, a “neo-Geisha”, hired to accompany Elites to parties. But nothing can prepare her for her first client: SEBACUS MAGNUS, the most powerful—and violent—Elite in Ephax.
After a life or death struggle, Victoria leaves him mortally wounded. Hunted down by police, she’s rescued by city terrorists led by the determined and attractive ARCTURUS. Seeing the brutality, and threat of Drought the working class citizens face every day, Victoria joins the terrorists in opposing the Elites.
But the situation takes a turn for the worse as police use bullets filled with Drought to suppress the workers’ protests and terrorist operation. And to complicate matters, Victoria also falls victim to the lethal substance—not enough to drain her of life instantaneously, but enough to make her struggle against the Elites more personal.
Amidst the turmoil, Arcturus has fallen deeply for Victoria. She wants him too, but is torn between loving him and hating him after learning that the plot he’s crafted to destroy the Elites involves using Drought. Time to implement this plan is running, however, out after a trusted member of the terrorists, DR. BURANDTIUS, is caught revealing their plans to an Elite.
Victoria’s world couldn’t be more upside down when, during the doctor’s interrogation, she learns that he’s the original creator of Drought and that the top-secret facilities where the drug is created lies beneath the School of the Elite. But the doctor’s not done sharing yet: He informs Victoria that the Elite who’s benefitting from her death is Sebacus Magnus, who’s already put a price on her capture.
With the police bombing the workers’ district and creating pure chaos, Victoria resolves that she’ll break into the facilities and destroy Drought by herself. Passing herself off as a student, she breaks into the School and accomplishes her mission.
Locked away in prison, Victoria has all but lost hope that she’ll be rescued. But on the day of her execution, a terrorist member breaks her out while Ephax is under siege by another city’s military. Much to her horror, she learns that Arcturus has offered up the research for Drought in exchange for military aid against the Elite.
As Victoria and the terrorists are transported away from the destruction, she can’t help but wonder ominously what the leaders of this new city will do with the research for Drought.