SYNOPSIS FOR GONE-IS IT TWO FOR TWO?

[Mercyone]

Does it still need work or is it finished?

Former New York detective JORDAN ST. JAMES quits her job after accidently killing a little girl during a shootout. She and her sister leave New York and move to a small town in California hoping to start fresh. Not ready to go back to work Jordan uses her investigative skills and resources to help her fellow townies. When one of her neighbors asks her to find her son’s missing dog, she agrees. Believing it to be a simple case, she convinces her younger sister ERIN an unemployed third grade teacher to help.

While searching for the dog they find a fresh grave and believing it contains the dog they dig it up, but instead of the dog they find two bodies. The medical examiner’s report on the bodies shows that some of their organs had been removed. They find the dog nearby muzzled and tied to a tree. The cruel treatment of the dog angers the sisters’ who then vow to find the person behind it. They track him to JONAH FRANKLIN, one of the town’s doctors’, whose wife was in a three car collision. The crash resulted in severe damage to some of her organs.

When doctor Franklin and his accomplices realize that Jordan and Erin are getting too close they send someone to slow down their investigation. One night while on her way home Erin is attacked by a knife wielding man wearing a mask and hoodie. For the first time she puts to use the fighting skills her sister taught her and saves herself. The attack enrages both Jordan and Erin making them even more determined to get the evidence needed by the police to put them behind bars.

Not only do they find evidence linking the doctor and his accomplices to the dog but enough evidence connecting them to the disappearances of indigent people living in Los Angeles whose organs they’ve been harvesting. But it’s taking much longer then Franklin expected because he first has to screen each person to find one with at least one healthy organ that he could use which is difficult since so many of them are unhealthy. When the sisters spy two of the doctors men carrying a woman into his house they break in to rescue her.

They trail the woman down to the basement and what they find shocks them to their very core. There find jail cells, operating rooms, and bags of blood stored in some kind of meat locker. Jordan uses her cell phone to take pictures of everything to send to her former partner and ex-lover detective AMANDA POSEY and her partner detective SPENCER JUSTACE in the Sheriff’s department.

Not long after one of the doctor’s accomplices comes down to the basement with the intention of putting an end to the sisters’ and their investigation. Jordan uses her martial arts skills to not only to fight for their lives but also the doctors two prisoners. She manages to knock him out and using his keys they lock him up in one of the cells. They make their way back upstairs where they send the photos.

When the police and several deputies arrive at the house, they go to the master bedroom on the second floor. There they find a replica of an intensive care unit along with the doctor’s wife who is hooked up to machines. After subduing the doctor, they place him under arrest. The sisters’ then join forces with the two detectives in search of one of the suspects who escaped. When they catch up to him, Jordan and Amanda team up to take him down.

Later, Jordan comes up with a theory that a fourth accomplice exists prompting her and Erin to find proof. Now the sheriff’s department, who has been working in conjunction with the police department for almost a year to solve this case, can finally put an end to the fear that the doctor and his accomplices have wrought.

[Lissie87]

I've just done some basic copy-editing:

Former New York detective JORDAN ST. JAMES quits her job after accidently killing a little girl during a shootout. She and her sister leave New York and move to a small town in California, hoping to start fresh. Not ready to go back to work, Jordan uses her investigative skills and resources to help her fellow townies. When one of her neighbors asks her to find her son’s missing dog, she agrees. Believing it to be a simple case, she convinces her younger sister ERIN, an unemployed third grade teacher, to help.

While searching for the dog, they find a fresh grave and, believing it contains the dog, dig it up. Instead of the dog, however, they find two bodies. The medical examiner’s report on the bodies shows that some of their organs had been removed. Jordan and Erinfind the dog nearby,muzzled and tied to a tree. The cruel treatment of the dog angers the sisters, and they vow to find the person behind it. Their search leads them to JONAH FRANKLIN, one of the town’s doctors, whose wife was in a three car collision. The crash resulted in severe damage to some of her organs.

When Dr. Franklin and his accomplices realize that Jordan and Erin are getting close, they send someone to slow down their investigation. One night as she's on her way home, Erin is attacked by a knife-wielding man wearing a mask and hoodie. For the first time she puts to use the fighting skills her sister taught her and saves herself. The attack enrages both Jordan and Erin, making them even more determined to get the evidence needed to put the perpetrators behind bars.

Not only do the sisters find evidence linking the doctor and his accomplices to the dog, but they also find evidence connecting them to the disappearance of a number of indigent people from Los Angeles whose organs they’ve been harvesting. Finding appropriate organs is taking much longer than Franklin expected, because so many of the ones he's already stolen are unhealthy.

When the sisters spy two of the doctors carrying a woman into Franklin's house, they break in to rescue her. They find her in the basement along with jail cells, operating rooms, and bags of blood stored in a meat locker. Jordan takes pictures of everything with her cell phone and sends them to her former partner and ex-lover detective AMANDA POSEY in the Sheriff’s department.

Soon one of the doctor’s accomplices comes down to the basement with the intention of putting an end to the sisters and their investigation. Using her martial arts skills, Jordan knocks him out and useshis keys to lock him up in one of the cells. They make their way back upstairs where they send the photos.

The police arrive and search the house. They find the doctor’s wife hooked up to machines. After subduing the doctor, they place him under arrest. The sisters join forces with detectives to find one of the suspects who has escaped. When they catch up to him, Jordan and Amanda take him down.

Later Jordan and Erin track down a fourth accomplice and finally, after a year, the case is put to rest.

[WhiteGardenia]

Hi Mercyone.  I have weighed in a couple of times on your query for Gone.  I made several suggestions regarding missing commas and apostrophes in the wrong places, but you do not seem to correct these issues.  That's totally okay if you want to keep it the way it is, but don't think think for a moment that an agent won't notice this! An apostrophe does not belong after sisters.  The word is not possessive in either of the two mentions in your synopsis.

If you don't want to take my word for it (or Lissie87's), I suggest enabling your grammar checker in Word and look for any green underlining throughout your ms and related documents. 

If you are asking if this is "finished," I do not believe this is quite ready.  Sorry for the tough love, but I really believe you can make this better!