New query better than the old?

[edelweiss]

Midwest,

Yes, I could write the query that way, but it feels a little like I'd be shortchanging the first third of the book. I'll need to think about it for a while.

Thanks again for all your efforts!

[Midwest]

No worries - happy to help. You totally know best, so go w/ what you feel it needs to say. Good luck with it, and I'll keep my eye out for revisions if you post them.

Now, off to the movies with my sweetheart. 

[Careyrox]

 

Midwest said it perfectly.