Okay, this is the best that I could piece together, and after going over it a few times, it is still way way too long and much too convoluted to make sense to anyone but me, and maybe Trist. Help?

SYNOPSIS FOR THE NIGHT:
Evil, magic, and darkness rule until a girl is born with a power to overthrow them all or irrevocably tighten their hold on the world. Her name is Aerael, and after discovering her power, she sets out on a journey to a far-off scribble on a map given to her by a majical being called a wym. Accompanied by two friends and a sarcastic kitten who isn’t what he seems, they plunge headfirst into a dangerous world of majic, magic, and long forgotten tales, and along the way, come to know more about Aerael’s power, majic of the night, and how important she really is to the fate of all things.
THE NIGHT takes place in a fantastical world where majic and magic are at war. Majic is the very essence of all life, the energy that the creator god, Elorrim, used to make everything, and magic is the warped fusion of six of the seven kinds of majic. An immortal, a wym known as Varlo, created magic, and gathered followers, known as the Corrupted. He destroyed nearly all of the pure wyms with the help of humans from a distant land, who later colonize the realm and call it Mioria. As the battle between Varlo’s followers and Elorrim’s followers comes to a close, a prophecy is given that one will be born with the power to either overthrow the grasp of Varlo on the land and restore it to its former glory or reaffirm Varlo’s hold and cast the world into eternal darkness.
The story begins in the last days of the wyms with a wym of wind called Siri, who sees her brother and his wife fall, and is almost killed herself. She meets a wym of water who explains that they are the last of their kinds, and together they go into hiding. The prologue then skips to nearly one thousand years later, when wyms are of legend, majic is forbidden and unheard of in most of the land, the Corrupted rule with human followers of their own, called Varloi, and Aerael is born.
Aerael has a normal life for one in her time, a peasant, her only valuable possession a necklace that has been handed down in her family for generations. It was considered only an expensive trinket until it was latched around her neck the night she was born, when the small, black pendant began to glow like the stars. Fifteen years later, she lives as an only child, her mother ill as long as she can remember, and her father always working to stay afloat. Unlike her friend, Nari, she had no dreams of someday marrying and leaving her parents, and when her father approaches her on her birthday about the subject, she doesn’t know what to think.
Her fate is decided for her when the son of their lord, Aden, seeks her hand and uses his birthright to force her to choose either marriage to him or a life on the streets for her family. She sees no way out, but when her life is threatened, a cold power with a life of its own emerges and eliminates the danger. Scared and confused, Aerael decides that she must leave her home to protect her parents from Aden’s wrath. Her friends, Rowan and Nari, choose to accompany her, and on their way out of the city, they are given a majical map by a strange, old woman, who informs them that what Aerael has is majic, not magic, and that they are to go to a place across the country where all will be explained.
As they leave, they find that Aden’s mind is no longer set on a wedding band, but on a stake to punish her for her crimes, as his men pursue them into the forests surrounding town. Nari gets seperated from Aerael and Rowan and is caught in a blizzard, almost freezing to death before a mysterious man heals her and returns her to her friends. Aerael encounters a great, black cat the size of house and passes out in a flash of silver light, only to wake safely in their camp and wonder if it was a dream. They travel through the woods to Denval, and Aerael leaves her friends after a few days, convinced that she’s ruining their lives by forcing them to live as outcasts. The evening that Aerael leaves, Rowan confesses to Nari that he's been keeping secret a power that he's only obtained since they left, accompanied by strange dreams and unexplainable knowledge. Nari promises to keep his majic a secret.
In Denval, Aerael is robbed, and the majic saves her life once again, but she uses it all and doesn’t wake for a couple of weeks. During this time, she has a dream of five magical creatures that she can’t see. They attack her, and, helpless to stop them, she falls under their onslaught and they finish her off. Rowan brings her back to life with his majic, but Aerael has no memory of Rowan’s act, and she doesn't suspect anything.
They leave Denval and are attacked by six Varloi, whom Aerael battles, putting five to sleep and killing the leader. The murder haunts her until she is distracted from it when she meets an avarilis named Tobias, a black, sarcastic kitten by day and the great beast she met in the northern forests by night. She learns that he was sent to instruct her in majic as she traveled. They make their way south, chased by Varloi, met by strange, majical creatures, and travel through various towns and villages, including the city of Uum, a place that clings to its majical roots and has a prophecy about Aerael coming to them.
Aerael is nearly killed there by someone who believes that she is going to cast the world to its doom, and they leave after she recovers. Rowan is captured by the Varloi the dark witch that they were sent to hunt for by Varlo. Tobias attempts a rescue before Rowan can be taken to the capital, Charenon, but is captured himself, and Aerael and Nari attempt to free them twice in the capital, succeeding partially the second time, and they quickly flee to the mountains one member short.
The king sends his son, Taeonirellion, and his foremost Varloi to pursue them across the Eraina Mountains and into the uninhabited Plains of Bloodshed, where they engage in a couple short clashes until they make it to the Forgotten Woods, far beyond the borders of the kingdom. Taeon demands to battle Aerael alone, and the Varloi abandon him, taking with them his horse and provisions. He loses the fight and comes away from it with a better understanding of his own power. The Varloi follow Aerael and Rowan into a majical circle of remembrance, and Aerael is struck and passes out, and Rowan kills all but the lead Varloi, who is driven mad. Nari can’t enter the field and rejoins them when they exit, and they then travel to the heart of the forest, where they find the home of the last surviving wyms, Lithria Terl’i, the Last Haven.
The lead Varloi travels back to Charenon and confronts Dardrion in his madness, and the keralen smites the Varloi and allows Tobias an audience. He gives the avarilis his freedom and a message to carry to his sucessor, for he decides to leave his throne, and Tobias decides to deliver the message before returning to the wyms. Aerael speaks briefly with the wym's leader, Cyria, and then undergoes a command placed on her by all of the wyms to break the link that bonds her with Tobias. It works, but after the bond is broken, the different kinds of majic break free of the command and attack her mind, trying to tear away a barrier that keeps them out. Aerael is sure that something went terribly wrong, and she fights back until she has no strength left, and the majics surge through her. Her world goes black and she knows no more.
So there it is. If you guys could let me know which details can go, how things can be condensed and made more snappy, and just general how-to-make-it-make-sense-to-others, that would be great. Thanks.
