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« on: March 30, 2016, 03:57:25 PM »

I'm working on the next Seven Archangels novel, and I suck at titles. Really, really terrible at them. Either I get a title fully-formed when I start the story or else I just don't get one at all.

This time, I had one fully formed, only now I'm not happy with it, and nothing else is coming to me.

The book is an adventure romp with angels.

If you want the early version of the blurb, the one I wrote before writing the book, it's here:

Hell's high command is up to something, and Remiel knows it's not pre-planning for Corporate Field Day. When Remiel and Zadkiel infiltrate the underworld, they discover Satan's new weapons only to unwittingly set off the first one, leaving Zadkiel blind and Remiel disabled, as well as maiming one of the high-ranking demons.

While Michael spearheads a team into the heart of Hell to disable the rest of the weapons, Remiel and Zadkiel seek refuge on Earth among the early Christian community and must at the same time avoid, or disarm, one of their deadliest enemies. Because like any predator, a wounded demon is twice as dangerous. And he knows they're holding the only possible chance for him to save himself.


The working title from word number one was "Shrapnel Of The Dead."

No one likes it.

Okay. Well, I like the shrapnel part. So I'm kind of stumbling around here, and I can't give the info to my cover artist until I have a title because she kind of needs that to do a title, so please help me talk this through.

Shrapnel Of The Dead {the original one}
Shrapnel's Cost  {Shrapnel's NOUN}
Mortality's Shrapnel {NOUN's Shrapnel}

Knowing me, it'll probably end up with a title like The Colorless Weight Of Sleeping Green Ideas but really...help?
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« Reply #1 on: March 30, 2016, 04:42:36 PM »

Well, I really like The Colorless Weight Of Sleeping Green Ideas, but yeah, let's work with Shrapnel.

Actually, let's not. Please don't hate me, but MUST we have Shrapnel? It's such an awkward-sounding word.

Immortal Weapons
Wings of Shrapnel (see, I'm not being totally unhelpful by ignoring shrapnel)
Deadliest Shrapnel (and the word shrapnel starts looking weirder and weirder)
Shrapnel of the Demon
Weapons of the Demon
Among the Mortals
Wounded Demon

I don't know...maybe something in there will spark a better idea for you?
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« Reply #2 on: March 30, 2016, 05:02:27 PM »

I kind of think "demons" needs to be in there somewhere so you know what the book is about. Shrapnel's Cost could be a WWII book...

How about:
The Wounded and the Damned
Demonic Wounds
The Devil's Arsenal

Any of those appeal?
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« Reply #3 on: March 30, 2016, 07:02:49 PM »

The angels are the focus of the book, not the demons, so I'd prefer to leave them out of the title.

If Shrapnel has to go, it goes, but know that I'm going to make a Sad Face at you first.  wink2

The other titles in the series so far are:

An Arrow In Flight
Sacred Cups
Annihilation

In that company, Mortality's Shrapnel or Shrapnel of the Dead didn't seem so awkward to me. I don't mind a long title, but shrapnel comes from the way the demons' weapon was made from the debris of something the angels blew up in the previous book. Shards would work too, I guess. Mortality's Shards. (Shards Of The Dead totally doesn't work. Even I can hear that.)

Bleh. Titles.
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« Reply #4 on: March 30, 2016, 07:20:48 PM »

My immediate reaction is what does shrapnel have to do with angels? It distracts me.
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« Reply #5 on: March 30, 2016, 07:47:09 PM »

This is the third book in the series (they're out of order) so by now, the reader is pretty much over the "hey, they're angels!" bit and they'll just go ahead and read the book. The full title will be Seven Archangels: Whatever Of The Whatever.
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« Reply #6 on: March 30, 2016, 07:48:00 PM »

If Shrapnel is out, Splinters works too. I'm looking for a word that means Itty Bitty Bits That Could Hurt You.
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« Reply #7 on: March 30, 2016, 09:27:57 PM »

Seven Archangels: Shards of Evil

(And just pretend I wasn't doing the Mike Myers's ee-VIL. Froo-its of the de-VIL. Karma to whoever gets that reference.)
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« Reply #8 on: March 30, 2016, 09:39:22 PM »

Seven Archangels: Shards of Evil

(And just pretend I wasn't doing the Mike Myers's ee-VIL. Froo-its of the de-VIL. Karma to whoever gets that reference.)

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My contribution is Slivers of Evil or Splinters of Evil. I like the common 'L' sound. 
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« Reply #9 on: March 30, 2016, 09:58:18 PM »

Seven Archangels: Shards of Evil

(And just pretend I wasn't doing the Mike Myers's ee-VIL. Froo-its of the de-VIL. Karma to whoever gets that reference.)

So I Married an Ax Murderer?



My contribution is Slivers of Evil or Splinters of Evil. I like the common 'L' sound. 

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I like Splinters of Evil. It's even better because my critique group is called the Splinters. Smiley
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« Reply #10 on: March 30, 2016, 11:20:43 PM »

How about

The Scatter of Shrapnel or something?
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« Reply #11 on: March 30, 2016, 11:42:40 PM »

Well, your titles so far were four words, then two, then one, so this one should be zero words, right?  wink2

An Arrow in Flight is my favorite of the titles you've already used. My favorite way to title things is from a phrase in the book itself. It's how EXPIRATION DATE became SMALL THINGS. IDK if that's helpful, but I can't think of anything using shrapnel/shards/splinters that I like.
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« Reply #12 on: March 31, 2016, 01:19:23 AM »

I like shrapnel. :D

I think to use it, though, you need to contrast imagery. Something terrible with something beautiful. Splinter is good too.

Shrapnel Among(st) (The?) Angels
Splintered Light
Splintered Salvation
Heaven's Splintered Light


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« Reply #13 on: March 31, 2016, 06:07:00 AM »

Well, your titles so far were four words, then two, then one, so this one should be zero words, right?  wink2


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« Reply #14 on: March 31, 2016, 06:13:29 AM »

I like shrapnel. :D

I think to use it, though, you need to contrast imagery. Something terrible with something beautiful. Splinter is good too.


Oh, I see! That makes total sense. THat's part of how we came up with The Wrong Enemy as a title.

An Arrow in Flight is my favorite of the titles you've already used. My favorite way to title things is from a phrase in the book itself. It's how EXPIRATION DATE became SMALL THINGS.

Which is also how we came up with The Wrong Enemy. The slight problem here was that I haven't edited the book yet, and that's the stage when the awesome phrases start clicking into place.

I wanted to get the cover set up so everything would be ready to go and I could do promo stuff, but I'm still neck-deep in working on Pickup Notes (another book that was like yanking wisdom teeth to title.) Bulletproof Vestments titled itself after a character's offhand remark. Half Missing got a title after I wrote sobbing to a friend and said, "We need to go on submission, but neither my agent nor I has even the slightest clue..."  (She hasn't offered any titles yet, but she will read the book later on after I've edited it a bit.)

Something like "Splinters Of The Damned" just sounds so...weird to me. But I really like the idea of pairing the dangerous thing with the beautiful thing. I'm going to have to look through that. (Unfortunately "Shattered Souls" has already been taken by a writer I adore, so I'll just keep looking.)  Grin Grin
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