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Author Topic: Preparing for PBPitch  (Read 614 times)
jpm327
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« on: June 20, 2018, 03:19:25 PM »

My first time doing something like this - so...here's my pitch below:

Tired mother of 2 young kids comes home from work and invents a fun game to get some rest. She becomes “BABY MOMMY” and turns the tables on her kids! Then, they take care of her for a little while. The kids delight as they feed her, read stories and clean up!
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« Reply #1 on: June 20, 2018, 05:58:30 PM »

My first time doing something like this - so...here's my pitch below:

Tired mother of 2 young kids comes home from work and invents a fun game to get some rest. She becomes “BABY MOMMY” and turns the tables on her kids! Then, they take care of her for a little while. The kids delight as they feed her, read stories(,) and clean up!

This is so cute that I smiled when reading it!  Smiley

*Not sure about exclamation points in a pitch.

**I might have been a little heavy-handed on my suggested cuts, so let's see what others might say. Good luck with this!  Smiley
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« Reply #2 on: June 21, 2018, 02:56:03 AM »

Thank you so much! I really appreciate your edits, I’m so excited to pitch this book  clap
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« Reply #3 on: June 21, 2018, 06:51:05 AM »

My first time doing something like this - so...here's my pitch below:

Tired mother of 2two young kids comes home from work and invents a fun game to get some rest. She becomes BABY MOMMY and turns the tables on her kids!. Then, they take care of her for a little while. The kids delight as they feed her, read stories, and clean up!.

Most of this is just what 007 said. I would also spell out the number two, and not use quotes around what I assume is the name of the book. Your cute concept is sure to appeal to the little ones. Good luck!
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« Reply #4 on: June 21, 2018, 08:07:49 AM »

Thank you! Going to send out the morning pitch and then it says you can pitch again after 2 p.m. Thank you for all the advice! xo
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« Reply #5 on: June 22, 2018, 09:05:55 AM »

@007 so far nothing yet boooooo

But your comment made me so happy, just wanted to tell you that Smiley So thanks again!
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