Noah Lukeman, author of The First Five Pages
, The Plot Thickens
, and A Dash of Style
, has decided to make his e-book HOW TO WRITE A GREAT QUERY LETTER
free, as a way to give back to the writing community. No strings attached! http://www.lukeman.com/greatquery/download.htm
Emsky, I owe you BIG TIME. After reading Noah Lukeman’s e-book, I realize why my queries are being rejected. Instead of following Lukeman’s three paragraph rule, my queries are a lot closer to novellas.
Just to demonstrate the difference it makes, I took one of my rejected queries, and rewrote it using the three paragraph rule. The original version of my query for NO TEARS FOR JACK is in the World’s Worst Query Letters
section of this forum. Who would have ever guessed that? In case you didn’t, I have a link to it below.http://querytracker.net/forum/index.php?topic=632.0
Below is the new and improved query, following Lukeman's three paragraph rule.
Tears and Cheers Literary Agency
Attn: Mrs. Red Ayes
28897 43th Street, Suite 678
New York, NY 10010
Attn: Mrs. Ayes:
I am writing to you because you represented It’s Hard to Love a Bonehead
by Lillie Ann Lovegarth, and I feel my book is similar.
When a thirty-six-year-old bachelor is told he has less than a year to live, he decides to do something about his greatest regret, not settling down and having a family. The protagonist offers a financially strapped thirty-four-year-old widow title to his home, if she and her children will agree to live with him for one year, or until he dies. Wanting to experience life as a family man, the protagonist gets to deal with the problems of a teenage son and a teenage daughter while enjoying the adoration of six-year-old twin girls, who never got to know their father.
I write fiction for a living. So far, I am not doing so well financially, but it does seem to cover all of the cost of my emotional well being.
Thank you for your consideration and I look forward to hearing from you.
Marlene LamontWhat did I tell you? What an improvement it makes.
I hope everyone paid particular attention to the second paragraph. I crammed the synopsis into three sentences. Yep, that’s all you get to use for the second paragraph. Fortunately, Lukeman did not put a limit on the number of words you can put in each of those three sentences. I was pretty happy about that, since I have been known to use up to sixty words in a single sentence.
Armed with this new information, expect to see my name in the SUCCESS STORIES section of this forum, soon. The only limiting factor remaining for me, at this point, is that QT only lists the names of 1,111 literary agents. I’ll just call that my short list for now.