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Author Topic: YA Romance Novel.  (Read 2452 times)
Falthor
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« on: July 23, 2011, 10:16:15 PM »

Quick story blow by blow...  2 separate stories in this one...  a 3 way love triangle between 2 girls and a guy each with feelings for the other 2, as well as a revenge plot by another protagonist who will play more of a roll in future endeavors.

  Originally I was calling this "Tangled"  it was simple and spoke volumes to the type of novel it was...  and then Disney decided to make their "Tangled" so now I'm looking for other options.

  Currently I'm calling this "Between Friends"  but I'm not sold on this...  the characters have already told me what the story for the second book is, so I have no idea how far this will go, and how many "books" I'll end up writing about these characters.

  What do you think?  Does "Between Friends" cut it for a sort of Sweet Valley High Meets Degrassi type story?
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« Reply #1 on: June 21, 2012, 12:07:23 PM »

I think it's serviceable, but it doesn't stand out. And sadly, I don't have many suggestions...maybe find some cliche and give it a spin?
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« Reply #2 on: June 21, 2012, 12:11:40 PM »

I don't know that Disney's movie title is a deal breaker. Apples and eggrolls and considering the demographic you're pitching to, it might benefit you but certainly can't hurt you. If you haven't, google it and see if there are any books with the same title and then I'd still consider genre before chucking it.
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« Reply #3 on: June 28, 2012, 02:17:58 PM »

You might go for the old Dylan title "Tangled up in Blue".
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« Reply #4 on: June 28, 2012, 02:19:33 PM »

You might go for the old Dylan title "Tangled up in Blue".
No. no Unless there is a direct link between a song and the book I wouldn't do it.
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« Reply #5 on: June 28, 2012, 02:19:57 PM »

I like Tangled, so what about "Entangled" to keep you separate from disney?
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« Reply #6 on: September 07, 2012, 11:09:26 AM »

How about TRIAD?
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« Reply #7 on: September 07, 2012, 06:50:26 PM »

Can you post your query/back-cover copy? It would help us brainstorm titles.
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« Reply #8 on: November 04, 2012, 10:35:00 AM »

  Sorry I haven't been here in a while.  I'm settled on "Entangled" (actually one of the first titles I thought of before I went simple and grabbed "Tangled")  But I'm still not 100% Sold on the idea.

  My Query is still in the process of getting a complete overhaul.  I can't find the post where I was toying with ideas but I'm going to post the re-worked first 5 pages in the corresponding forum, if you want to check it out.
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« Reply #9 on: November 04, 2012, 11:58:48 AM »

okay here's the hook...  I guess this could easily be Back Cover Copy, but I'm obviously planning this more as a Foreward...  or at least that was what it was when I started...

Foreword

  If you asked me yesterday afternoon whether my life would make an interesting movie I would have said “sure, maybe with a little polish… okay, a lot of polish.”  Last night, though, changed everything.

  You see I'm not what you'd call popular.  I'm not a guy who's into sports, or cars, or even sports cars.  Hell, I’m not even the head of the AV or Drama club.  I’m that weird guy hanging out in the library on my lunch, seemingly happiest all alone.  For most, my presence in school is just something to be ignored.

  I mean it’s not like I don’t have friends.   Don’t get that Idea.  I have 2 amazing friends; 2 Wonderful, gorgeous, generous, patient, loving friends who straddle the lines of cool to hang out with me time to time.  The loner and the cheerleaders, I can almost hear them snickering about it behind their hands as I walk down the hallway to get on the bus.

  I've lived in the same house for as long as I can remember.  The front windows staring blindly down the street at the dead end.  There’s a park in the field down there, it’s actually where the opening scene takes place.

  This is of course where I met her.

  Of course there is a “her”.   Every great story in time has a “her” I’d be willing to bet.   How many crazy love stories have more than one I wonder?  How about 2?  While we’re at it why not make them the main character’s two best friends?

  I'm doing my best to remain a little detached here, because up until about 7 hours ago we were friends.  The thought of being more than friends might have passed through my mind as something that would be cool, but I’d never taken it seriously.

  That all changed at the party.    I made a play for what I thought I wanted.  For the first time in my life I truly rolled the dice…
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« Reply #10 on: November 04, 2012, 02:30:52 PM »

Hi. I just commented on your title in the first 5 thread.  wink2
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« Reply #11 on: November 04, 2012, 05:59:14 PM »

OKay can't win for losing.   Guess I do need ideas, if it's not Disney, it's my future publisher taking my book name.  :-)
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« Reply #12 on: November 04, 2012, 08:27:10 PM »

OKay can't win for losing.   Guess I do need ideas, if it's not Disney, it's my future publisher taking my book name.  :-)

If it makes you feel better, I struggled similarly until I found the perfect title (it went through at least 6). I was so happy with it. Then, when my agent called me to tell me that a publisher had offered, she revealed that their first request was that the title be changed.
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« Reply #13 on: November 04, 2012, 08:40:15 PM »

it's actually funny because "Entangled was the name I had in mind when i was writing it originally.  My Wife thought it sounded snooty though so I went to Tangled.   and for 2 re-writes it was Tangled, Then Disney brought that movie out.

So then I jumped to "Between Friends" but it never sat well with me.

Then Entangled.

  Now I'm back to square one again.
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« Reply #14 on: November 05, 2012, 03:54:57 AM »


JUST BETWEEN FRIENDS

TWO CHEERLEADERS ARE BETTER THAN ONE

WHEN A GEEK GETS LUCKY...

TRIPLE THREAT

DOUBLE THE DANGER, DOUBLE THE LOVE

I thought you might be looking for a little humor. I like the first one the best-your idea with one extra word. But you never know with these people. Look at TWILIGHT-it was originally titled FORKS, and look how that turned out!
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