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Queries and Agents => Post your Elevator Pitch => Topic started by: Sudhanshu on August 08, 2019, 10:58:45 AM
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It is my first attempt. Please review!!
A reckless teenager discovers that he is the last blood of a fallen warrior civilization and his heart holds an ancient stone with limitless powers.
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Correct me if I am being too literal minded, but how can his heart hold anything except blood, much less a stone? Am I reading this incorrectly? But a stone with limitless powers sounds interesting. Limitless powers sounds too broad. Are these powers of the mind--telekinesis or mind reading for example? Or does the stone confer super powers such as flying, exceptional strength, or invulnerability? Or does it refer to something else? This is a point which may need clearing up.