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Title: ** updated ** I WANT IT ALL - memoir, 73K
Post by: tatewilson44 on November 06, 2019, 08:38:56 PM
Hey all! I've posted on here a few times and gotten some great feedback. Here's my latest draft. Also I'm trying to figure out if I pitch it as a novel, memoir, or narrative non fiction. It's all true. Any feedback or advice would be greatly appreciate.

Thanks so much!



Dear Agent,

I am seeking representation for my recently-completed memoir. At 73,000 words, I Want it All  follows the madcap adventures of five childhood friends trying to climb the tumultuous Hollywood fame ladder

At nineteen, I moved to Hollywood to become a rock star, but I found little success. However, when my group of naive and eccentric friends —an anxiety-riddled Swede, a charming, narcissistic actor, an incessantly scheming entrepreneur, and a looney hockey player—moved from Colorado to join me, their belief in their fame-filled fantasies reignited my hope. Together, we embarked on our quest to become Hollywood legends.

Everyone began searching for our own way to make it. I buy a car from a friendly middle aged gay movie producer who offers me an internship and assurs me it will lead to an executive producing credit on his next film. One of us is up for a soap opera that could pay him $500,000 a year while the rest of the crew is ready to help him spend it. Another signs with a top modeling agency but still can’t seem to lose his virginity.

Fueled by the feeling and the signs that point to us being famous soon, the group navigates our way through the absurd jungle of tinseltown and along the way run into its many strange inhabitants. But becoming a rockstar, movie star, or any kind of star, as it turns out, is not easy. Amid the maze of LA, where some find their way to fame while others are lost forever, we begin to lose momentum and faith in our grandiose fantasies and the crew struggles to keep our friendships and dreams of “making it” alive.

Los Angeles County’s population grows more than 100,000 residents per year, and more than half of them are people pursuing careers in the entertainment industry, many with fantasies just like ours. This book is for the dreamers who have made the leap, hope to one day or wish they had, stories they can relate to, and maybe even learn from.

I’ve lived in Los Angeles on and off for 10 years (I've only moved away 5 times), and have worked in nearly every facet of the entertainment industry from music, film and TV production, to commercial and theatrical acting. I’m currently in the editing phase of my next book, a Jim Wilson spiritual adventure.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Sincerely,

James Tate Wilson
Title: Re: ** updated ** I WANT IT ALL - memoir, 73K
Post by: JayS on November 10, 2019, 06:04:04 PM
Hey all! I've posted on here a few times and gotten some great feedback. Here's my latest draft. Also I'm trying to figure out if I pitch it as a novel, memoir, or narrative non fiction. It's all true. Any feedback or advice would be greatly appreciate.

Thanks so much!

Sounds like a memoir. But I have no experience to cite.

Dear Agent,

I am seeking representation for my recently-completed memoir. At 73,000 words, I Want it All is a 73,000-word memoir that follows the madcap adventures of five childhood friends trying to climb the tumultuous Hollywood fame ladder[.]  Unless memoirs are different, then this paragraph would normally go at end with your bio.

At nineteen, I moved to Hollywood to become a rock star, but I found with little success. However, when my group of naive and eccentric friends —an anxiety-riddled Swede, a charming, narcissistic actor, an incessantly scheming entrepreneur, and a looney hockey player—moved from Colorado to join me, their belief in their fame-filled fantasies reignited my hope. Together, we embarked on our quest to become Hollywood legends.

Everyone began searching for our own way to make it. I buy a car from a friendly middle aged gay If him being gay is relevant, then you should say why in the query.  Otherwise I would leave it out movie producer who offers me an internship and assures me it will lead to an executive producing credit on his next film. One of us is up for a soap opera that could pay him $500,000 a year while the rest of the crew is ready to help him spend it. Another signs with a top modeling agency but still can’t seem to lose his virginity. Make it all past tense to match your query.

Fueled by the feeling and the signs that point to us being famous soon, the group we navigates our way through the absurd jungle of tinseltown and along the way run into its many strange inhabitants. But becoming a rockstar, movie star, or any kind of star, as it turns out, is not easy. Amid the maze of LA, where some find their way to fame while others are lost forever, we begin to lose momentum and faith in our grandiose fantasies and the crew struggles to keep our friendships and dreams of “making it” alive.

Los Angeles County’s population grows more than 100,000 residents per year, and more than half of them are people pursuing careers in the entertainment industry, many with fantasies just like ours. This book is for the dreamers who have made the leap, hope to one day or wish they had, with stories they can relate to, and maybe even learn from. Maybe combine this sentence with the last paragraph after the sentence stating your word count.

I’ve lived in Los Angeles on and off for 10 years (I've only moved away 5 times), and have worked in nearly every facet of the entertainment industry from music, film and TV production, to commercial and theatrical acting. I’m currently in the editing phase of my next book, a Jim Wilson spiritual adventure.. Others with more experience should weigh in on whether saying this helps or hurts considering yours is not a household name.  Overall, it looks like a fun read.  Good luck!

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Sincerely,

James Tate Wilson