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Title: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: Abigail on November 24, 2007, 06:52:23 AM
Here is a fun little game...CHANGING ADVERBS.

The trend these days is to try and not use adverbs when you can.  Adverbs are almost considered cheating, a writer's shortcut.  Of course, this point is debatable.  What is for certain however, is that a simple "He looked at me oddly" doesn't take up nearly as many words as "He sent me a look that should have made me recant my earlier statement, beg his forgiveness, and then banish myself into exile"

Here is the premise of the game...

1. You will be provided an adverb from the post before you.
2. Write a sentence using the adverb.
3. Write the sentence without using the adverb.
4. Leave an adverb for the next player.


So, if I received the adverb 'brusquely' my post would be...

"You use too many adverbs," her editor said brusquely.

"You use too many adverbs," her editor said, crumpling the manuscript and tossing it into the trash.

'mundanely'

And then, the next poster would play the game.  It should be fun.  So, be creative, put on your thinking caps!  Who will be the first player?

Have fun,
Abi


Here is the adverb...

'MUNDANELY'




 
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: elknutswife on November 24, 2007, 10:42:04 AM
all right, i'll take a whack at it....unfortunately i am the adverb queen and have been slammed by my crit mates on more than one occassion  ;D

"Your manuscript is just mundanely written," the editor said with a yawn.  (I know, bad sentence, but this is amazingly one of the adverbs I don't really use - now amazingly or unfortunately are another story)  ;D

"Your manuscript is just too ordinary, boring, nothing stands out," the editor said with a yawn.


Next abverb - suddenly
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: joanjunkmail on November 24, 2007, 12:15:06 PM
oh, suddenly - my mot de la morte!  after reading about 500 words, i realize that the entire story is taking place in a funhouse, coz everything happens 'suddenly'

"Suddenly, the door opened."

"John walked into the house."


Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: Chelc on November 24, 2007, 12:55:07 PM
oh, suddenly - my mot de la morte!  after reading about 500 words, i realize that the entire story is taking place in a funhouse, coz everything happens 'suddenly'

"Suddenly, the door opened."

"John walked into the house."



hey, you didn't list the next adverb to be used, yo!
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: Abigail on November 24, 2007, 01:33:30 PM
Chelc, I'm shocked! :surprise:

You were left with an open and free choice of adverbs...I expected more from the oh-so-great-one-who-can-carry-on-conversations-alone for nearly twenty posts!

Here, I'll leave you another adverb so you can play.  The game MUST go on...

'IMPATIENTLY'
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: joanjunkmail on November 24, 2007, 04:16:08 PM
Chelc, I'm shocked! :surprise:

yeah, I'm shocked too - she read the rules!

so, I apologize - kids were entering, expecting to be fed, as i was typing.  i abdicated my game duty in favor of my motherly duty... i'm sure i'll be forgiven (especially since the food was really lousy, for some reason - even the beer!  NEVER buy beer based on the promotional 'cuteness' - elf beer is so freakin' sweet it hurts your teeth.  live-n-learn, eh?)
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: Abigail on November 24, 2007, 05:09:48 PM
Chelc, I'm shocked! :surprise:

yeah, I'm shocked too - she read the rules!

Don't be too shocked that she read the rules...they were ONLY two posts above...had it been three?????
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: joanjunkmail on November 24, 2007, 05:13:40 PM
"You didn't leave an adverb for us," chelc complained impatiently.

"You didn't leave an adverb for us," chelc complained with an uncharacteristic inability to wait. (ha!)

INACCURATELY
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: Chelc on November 24, 2007, 06:55:05 PM
"one plus one plus two plus one equals four!" said JJM inaccurately.
"one plus one plus two plus one equals four!" said JJM with a complete ineptitude for the basic laws of mathmatics.
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: joanjunkmail on November 24, 2007, 07:25:26 PM
<i'm a CPA, sweetie!>

AHEM!  where's the next adverb??!!  HUH?!?!
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: Chelc on November 24, 2007, 09:18:10 PM
oh! omg! how did I forget that?! jesus, that was seriously hypocritical...
okay, next adverb:

incredulously

because I use that word waaaaaayyy too much.
and need ideas to help me stop using it.
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: elknutswife on November 24, 2007, 10:59:07 PM
k, how about

She stared at him increduously.

She stared at him, her mouth dropping open in disbelief.


and the next one is.....Inconceivably  (cause I just love that line from PB - Inconceivable!)
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: Abigail on November 25, 2007, 02:33:55 AM
Elky's penguin behaved inconceivably.

Elky's penguin behaved in a manner that was unjustifiable and inconceivable to say the least.


'ADMIRABLY'
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: elknutswife on November 25, 2007, 12:12:59 PM
Elky's penguin behaved admirably.

Elky's penguin behaved in a manner that was justified, dignified, and admirable.

 :rolf: :rolf: :rolf: :rolf:


and next, how about..... 'ridiculously'
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: Abigail on November 28, 2007, 03:12:49 PM
Elky's penguin walked ridiculously close to his buddy.

Elky's penguin was ridiculous to think he could walk within flipper range of his jokester buddy and not get knocked into the ice.
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: elknutswife on November 28, 2007, 05:40:50 PM
 :rof2: :rof2:  ah, my poor penguins   ;D  and what is the new adverb??????
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: Abigail on November 29, 2007, 01:36:45 AM
I love your penquins... ;D

Sorry...NaNo brain here!

The new adverb is...

'EXHAUSTEDLY'
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: mizzie on November 29, 2007, 06:21:32 PM
drained.

yup, you.

*uhm* mebbe I should have a look how the game is played? Sorry, I am procastinating right now.
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: joanjunkmail on November 29, 2007, 07:13:19 PM
She exhaustedly draped herself over her wordprocessor, trying to squeeze the last 1700 words into her story before the deadline.

[someone else finish it - i honestly can't think of anything!][oh, this is sad...]
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: Abigail on November 30, 2007, 10:41:53 AM
Let me NaNobuddy...

She fell face forward onto the keyboard with a thud as she finished typing the last words of her story jsut in time to meet the deadline.

new adverb 'POSITIVELY'
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: joanjunkmail on November 30, 2007, 03:53:36 PM
"when it absolutely, positively has to be there overnight."

"give up the caffeine, turn of the blackberry and read a book."

(sorry, still nanofrenzied)
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: Abigail on December 03, 2007, 10:37:30 AM
JJM...where's the ADVERB???
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: joanjunkmail on December 03, 2007, 04:00:37 PM
oops - frenziedly
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: Abigail on December 04, 2007, 12:08:12 PM
He frenziedly did his last minute Christmas shopping.

He, as always, waited until Christmas Eve to do his shopping and had to hurry around with the frenzied, maniacal last minute crowd.  (No, I'm not talking about my husband....whew, he was looking over my shoulder)

new adverb... 'COLDLY'   (because it is FREEZING here!  Us Californians can't take the cold...)


Abi

Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: Cole Gibsen on December 04, 2007, 12:13:48 PM
"I would never associate with the likes of you," she replied coldly.

"I would never associate with the like of you," she replied tossing the agent's editing service pamphlet back in their face.

Next adverb: swiftly (did we do that one already?)
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: Bline on December 04, 2007, 07:29:45 PM
Bline's obvious attempt to build Karma swiftly backfired as he rarely seemed to be logged on at the same time as his counterparts. :faint:

Bline's obvious attempt to build Karma failed as he was never logged on at the same time as his counterparts. 

Keep this going. Great idea to get those literary juices flowing.

Next word: "Cautiously" 
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: Bline on December 04, 2007, 08:05:35 PM
While Bline was away paying bills, Lannie surreptitiously snuck in a funny adverb and more karma. Whoohoo!   ;)

By the way, I just started reading your first 5. Gripping right from the start. I'll let you know when I finish.   



Next: Precariously
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: Abigail on December 05, 2007, 12:18:22 AM
Bline...wherre is your sentence not using the adverb surreptisously?
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: Abigail on December 30, 2007, 07:17:47 PM
He precariously teetered on the edge of the cliff.

He teetered, rocks sliding beneath his feet, the wind blowing with ferocity at the edge of the cliff and the white water rapids thrashing two-hundred feet below.

Next: OUTRAGEOUSLY
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: Alien on December 30, 2007, 10:00:23 PM
A potted plant doesn't know how to bitch for food--it'd be dead in a week--another brown desk ornament between his lamp and phone; "I'll treasure it always!" he said unctuously, hoping next Christmas she'd get him something useful like a pen.

A potted plant doesn't know how to bitch for food--it'd be dead in a week--another brown desk ornament between his lamp and phone; "I'll treasure it always!" he said slobbering borrowed gratitude, hoping next Christmas she'd get him something useful like a pen.

Next: Salubriously
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: Abigail on March 05, 2008, 11:35:55 PM
Living salubriously could get you nicknamed a goody-to-shoes.

Living a healthy, wholesome lifestyle could get you nicknamed a goody-to-shoes.


Next: CONCEITEDLY
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: Chelc on March 06, 2008, 07:20:11 PM
"my dress is better than hers," kat said concietedly.

with a vanity that made jessica's eyebrows twitch, kat said, "my dress is better than hers."
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: Abigail on March 08, 2008, 10:31:37 PM
Chelc...where's the next ADVERB???
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: joanjunkmail on March 09, 2008, 09:34:26 AM
forgetfully
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: Chelc on March 09, 2008, 10:42:13 AM
Chelc...where's the next ADVERB???
DANGIT!!!
i always forget  :(
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: Careyrox on June 22, 2012, 04:00:14 PM
He stood there, looking at me forgetfully.

"Remember me? From last night? We shared saliva and a whole lot of other body fluids?" Stella asked.

"Yeah, I don't remember a lot about last night. I was pretty tanked. Don't take it personal."

"Sorry? Don't take it personal? It was very personal," she replied.

His blue eyes stared at her, puzzled by her strong reaction. Not a flicker of a memory resonated in him.


Next one:

morosely
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: munley on June 22, 2012, 05:13:54 PM
After learning his wife had forgotten to buy French bread to go with with the soup, he ate his borscht morosely.

After learning his wife had forgotten to buy French bread to go with the soup, he slurped the borscht in slow, lethargic sips as he studied her eyes for the moment she would scream, "Stop!"

Next adverb:

unabashedly

Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: bodwen on August 02, 2012, 04:19:50 PM
She knew she couldn't sing, but her coworkers insisted she try karaoke. So she unabashedly  went to the mic.

She knew she couldn't sing, but her coworkers insisted she try karaoke. So she sauntered up to the mic, determined to give them a rendition of "Feelings" that would make their eyeballs bleed.

coyly
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: eallen99 on August 02, 2012, 06:03:49 PM
Allow me!

"I've never done this before...well...at least not with a man who used to be a woman," she said coyly.

She let her towel drop to the floor and resisted the urge to cover herself. "I've never done this before...well...at least not with a man who used to be a woman."

maliciously
Title: Re: Changing Adverbs...The Game!
Post by: bodwen on August 06, 2012, 01:30:48 PM
I told my mother-in-law I'm allergic to seafood, so she maliciously put shellfish in every dish she made. 
Next year I'm telling her I'm allergic to bacon.

I told my mother-in-law I'm allergic to seafood, so the dinner table in at my mother-in-law's looked like the judgement table for Iron Chef: Battle Shellfish.  She started off with clam chowder and oysters rockfeller, chilled down by tail-on shrimp with cocktail sauce, and washed down with gobletfuls of Clamato.  For the entree, she served crab au gratin with a side shrimp fried rice.  And for dessert, the piece de resistance, her special lobster, grapefruit, and avocado sorbet. 
Next year I'm telling her I'm allergic to bacon.

Squarely