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Synopsis Review / Re: ICE AND GLASS (LGBT Psych Thriller)
« Last post by ShadowBeam on Yesterday at 03:54:42 PM »Hi JEC112,
Glad my questions helped. Yes, this version is a lot clearer. A couple of small suggestions and one more clarification, and then I think you're good to go! Best of luck to you!
CORBIN MICHAELS is sitting in the dark room of Flashes nightclub in drag. While everyone around him has sex, asexual (Oh, okay.) Corbin shoots heroin. Once high, Corbin decides to find CAROLINE STURGESS at Harlem Highlights jazz club to apologize for his behavior at a failed intervention. Once outside, he is gay-bashed. Watch the repeat in close proximity. The drug masks the pain of the beating, and he makes it to the Harlem Highlight where he passes out.
He awakens two days later in the hospital with Caroline by his side. Because Corbin uses needles, (Got it!) the doctor orders an HIV test. Caroline, who came into contact with Corbin’s blood at the jazz club, (Makes sense!)decides to cut all ties with Corbin. He vows to become sober, until he goes home. A couple days later, Corbin’s boss gives him experimental heroin he makes beneath Flashes. (Ah ha!)Corbin blacks out. When he awakens, Caroline is dead on his bathroom floor. Corbin touches a knife on the floor, and memories return to him. He’s the one who killed her.
He hides Caroline’s body in the wooden shed in his yard. He’s not ready to go to the police, but he is ready for help. He starts therapy for his drug habit. But his boss won’t let him quit drugs so easily. While planning a drag Halloween at Flashes, Corbin’s boss gives him more experimental heroin. Corbin gives in to temptation. When he comes too, he finds his boss dead on his bed. He remembers nothing from the night before.
Corbin’s estranged brother visits and gives him an idea to regain memories: magic mushrooms. Corbin asks a co-worker for some. When his co-worker arrives to deliver them, he won’t leave without “payment.” Corbin fights back, but his co-worker injects him with laced heroin against his will. When Corbin becomes conscious the next day, he is unharmed. But his co-worker lies in the bathtub, a knife in his heart.
When Corbin hides the third body in the shed, he makes a discovery that shatters his soul: the other two bodies have vanished.
Corbin takes time to process everything, even writing a letter of guilt to the police. Finally, he eats the ‘shrooms. Corbin watches himself from a third-person perspective, and realizes a mind-boggling revelation: he didn’t kill his boss or co-worker. Someone dressed in black did. They’ve been manipulating him this entire time.
Corbin decides to confess to the police in person about what has been happening. He will go to jail, so he wants one final night of fun before turning himself in: the Halloween Extravaganza.
During the drag performance, the glass ceiling of Flashes breaks and three bodies fall to the floor. Once the chaos is over, the person who placed the bodies there reveals themselves, and Corbin understands he’s been wrong this whole time.
He didn’t kill Caroline. She’s standing right in front of him, dressed in the gown and crown his boss was supposed to wear that night. She reveals that she made Corbin stab her to send him to prison so she would finally be free of him. But Corbin won’t leave her alone. (Okay, you lost me here. He dragged her dead body to the shed, so how is he not leaving her alone?) So she murdered his boss for drug pushing, and his rapist co-worker to frame Corbin.
Now there’s only one way banish him from her life. Caroline shoots at him with a gun, but Corbin fights back. The two fight on the dance floor of Flashes. Corbin grabs the glass crown off of Caroline’s head and jams it into her throat. She rolls off of him just as the police arrive.
Three months later, Corbin is on probation and out of rehab. He visits Caroline in jail, though she can’t speak anymore. She just stares at him from behind plexiglass. Corbin leaves, his brother and mother wait for him. After all the drama and death, he’s finally going to be with his family again.
Glad my questions helped. Yes, this version is a lot clearer. A couple of small suggestions and one more clarification, and then I think you're good to go! Best of luck to you!
CORBIN MICHAELS is sitting in the dark room of Flashes nightclub in drag. While everyone around him has sex, asexual (Oh, okay.) Corbin shoots heroin. Once high, Corbin decides to find CAROLINE STURGESS at Harlem Highlights jazz club to apologize for his behavior at a failed intervention. Once outside, he is gay-bashed. Watch the repeat in close proximity. The drug masks the pain of the beating, and he makes it to the Harlem Highlight where he passes out.
He awakens two days later in the hospital with Caroline by his side. Because Corbin uses needles, (Got it!) the doctor orders an HIV test. Caroline, who came into contact with Corbin’s blood at the jazz club, (Makes sense!)decides to cut all ties with Corbin. He vows to become sober, until he goes home. A couple days later, Corbin’s boss gives him experimental heroin he makes beneath Flashes. (Ah ha!)Corbin blacks out. When he awakens, Caroline is dead on his bathroom floor. Corbin touches a knife on the floor, and memories return to him. He’s the one who killed her.
He hides Caroline’s body in the wooden shed in his yard. He’s not ready to go to the police, but he is ready for help. He starts therapy for his drug habit. But his boss won’t let him quit drugs so easily. While planning a drag Halloween at Flashes, Corbin’s boss gives him more experimental heroin. Corbin gives in to temptation. When he comes too, he finds his boss dead on his bed. He remembers nothing from the night before.
Corbin’s estranged brother visits and gives him an idea to regain memories: magic mushrooms. Corbin asks a co-worker for some. When his co-worker arrives to deliver them, he won’t leave without “payment.” Corbin fights back, but his co-worker injects him with laced heroin against his will. When Corbin becomes conscious the next day, he is unharmed. But his co-worker lies in the bathtub, a knife in his heart.
When Corbin hides the third body in the shed, he makes a discovery that shatters his soul: the other two bodies have vanished.
Corbin takes time to process everything, even writing a letter of guilt to the police. Finally, he eats the ‘shrooms. Corbin watches himself from a third-person perspective, and realizes a mind-boggling revelation: he didn’t kill his boss or co-worker. Someone dressed in black did. They’ve been manipulating him this entire time.
Corbin decides to confess to the police in person about what has been happening. He will go to jail, so he wants one final night of fun before turning himself in: the Halloween Extravaganza.
During the drag performance, the glass ceiling of Flashes breaks and three bodies fall to the floor. Once the chaos is over, the person who placed the bodies there reveals themselves, and Corbin understands he’s been wrong this whole time.
He didn’t kill Caroline. She’s standing right in front of him, dressed in the gown and crown his boss was supposed to wear that night. She reveals that she made Corbin stab her to send him to prison so she would finally be free of him. But Corbin won’t leave her alone. (Okay, you lost me here. He dragged her dead body to the shed, so how is he not leaving her alone?) So she murdered his boss for drug pushing, and his rapist co-worker to frame Corbin.
Now there’s only one way banish him from her life. Caroline shoots at him with a gun, but Corbin fights back. The two fight on the dance floor of Flashes. Corbin grabs the glass crown off of Caroline’s head and jams it into her throat. She rolls off of him just as the police arrive.
Three months later, Corbin is on probation and out of rehab. He visits Caroline in jail, though she can’t speak anymore. She just stares at him from behind plexiglass. Corbin leaves, his brother and mother wait for him. After all the drama and death, he’s finally going to be with his family again.
