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First Description Journal Entry
« on: August 12, 2007, 02:01:56 PM »
Sorry I don't have a pic guys. :( I will for the next one! But I hope that what I've already written is enough to give you a sense of the scene, so you can continue writing it.

My chief idea is to use my own descriptions in my book, and you guys can just take what you've written and tailor it to your own needs. Also, this is a good exercise! This is written with ____ as a character. For a pronoun, I use him/her.

Castaik Lake:

Cerulean waters gleamed beneath the summer sky, bending around slopes of towering oaks. Pale grass appeared in splotches on the ground, cast in shadow by the trees, whose glossy leaves groped for the light of the sun. Beneath him/her, white, gnarled roots dove into the ground, probing it for water. A breeze cooled ____'s face, carrying with it the sound of the clapping waves.

____ walked down to the sand that kissed the water's edge, and felt the hot pebbles crawl through the crevices between his/her toes. The ground glistened like ivory. A seagull squawked in the distance, followed by a wind that rustled the leaves of the surrounding trees. Across the lake, a mountain loomed, bereft of life. It held a pallid complexion, like an ailing person.
« Last Edit: August 12, 2007, 05:29:06 PM by DanielT »

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Re: First Description Journal Entry
« Reply #1 on: August 12, 2007, 06:59:31 PM »
That is really REALLY nice. i think I'm going to become an agent and rep you two teeny boppers. Is that a real place near where you ARE?
Karma for you, kid.

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Re: First Description Journal Entry
« Reply #2 on: August 12, 2007, 08:15:46 PM »
teeny boppers?
Ahem...teeny boppers are 12 year olds at boy bands concerts squealing "OMG, I LOVE THIS SONG! AAIIIEEEGGHHH!!!"
Dan is 15, he said? Almost 16 right.
I'm 17 next month.
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And I'm confused Dan, why can't we just decide on a name for this character if this is community fiction?

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Re: First Description Journal Entry
« Reply #3 on: August 12, 2007, 09:08:15 PM »
It is, and it's not. I'm actually planning on using my own entries in my actual writing. You guys can then take your own posts, and use them in your book, should a character ever go to such a place.

And thanks for the karma!!  ;D I'm giving you karma for being so nice to us teens.

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Re: First Description Journal Entry
« Reply #4 on: August 12, 2007, 09:14:08 PM »
okay. sure.  ;D
And now everyone is logged out of QT and I'm bored out of my skull...

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Re: First Description Journal Entry
« Reply #5 on: August 12, 2007, 09:22:50 PM »
I'm not!!

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Re: First Description Journal Entry
« Reply #6 on: August 12, 2007, 09:24:14 PM »
Yay!
 :wink:
Then you are bidden to entertain me. And deprive me of sleep...

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Re: First Description Journal Entry
« Reply #7 on: August 12, 2007, 09:28:43 PM »
Ah whatever...I have to get up at 7 tomorrow (yet again  :rant:)
So I should probably log out...and take a sleeping pill (I'm a full-fledged insomniac)
Wait, I lied. I'm staying on  ;D

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Re: First Description Journal Entry
« Reply #8 on: August 12, 2007, 09:32:40 PM »
Haha that's the spirit.

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Re: First Description Journal Entry
« Reply #9 on: August 12, 2007, 09:42:58 PM »
Yes, but now the forums are dead, again...so the question is should I be good and attempt sleep or stay up until 2:30 like every other night?  ;)

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Re: First Description Journal Entry
« Reply #10 on: August 12, 2007, 09:46:26 PM »
In a way, I want to tell you to stay up. But then, lack of sleep does eventually catch up with you. I've been awake every day until 3:30 (Pacific time), but then I wake up at noon.  ;D Oh, I love summer.

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Re: First Description Journal Entry
« Reply #11 on: August 12, 2007, 09:48:57 PM »
Oh, but I never sleep. Five hours is considered heaven. Do you have any idea how many different sleeping pills I've been perscribed to in the past two years? I lost count...my body just rebels against drugs I guess.

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Re: First Description Journal Entry
« Reply #12 on: August 12, 2007, 09:53:02 PM »
Interesting. Don't people who can't sleep well usually have an overly active mind? (I love how on-topic we are).

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Re: First Description Journal Entry
« Reply #13 on: August 12, 2007, 09:59:25 PM »
I do have an overly active mind, yes I know.
But I've never ever in my life had peaceful sleeps, unless aided my medicine.
I had reeaallly bad night terrors from ages 3-6 ish. (NOT nightmares, terrors are different...google it)