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Author Topic: Pitch for a humorous historical mystery  (Read 1808 times)
cdecho
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« on: October 05, 2016, 02:15:00 PM »

This is an elevator pitch for The League of Extraordinary Ladies of the Evening

Short ride: Crime fighting sporting ladies in gilded age New York

Long ride: Nettie Ecklund, the Hoosier Huntress, and the eccentric bohemian, Euphoria Blanc, with their team of surprisingly talented soiled doves fight grabbers, slum lords, robber barons, and a mysterious cult in gilded age New York.

Whaddaya think?
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« Reply #1 on: October 06, 2016, 11:42:51 AM »

I prefer the short ride. You might want to include, "... talented soiled doves..." I like that line and there's plenty of room for it.

Good luck,
JP
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« Reply #2 on: October 06, 2016, 11:43:14 PM »

Thanks John. Strangely talented soiled doves fight crime in gilded age New York
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« Reply #3 on: October 08, 2016, 09:09:51 PM »

Are people less familiar with the period going to know what "soiled doves" are? I only know from Karen Memory. Agreed it's an evocative phrase.

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« Reply #4 on: October 08, 2016, 10:53:02 PM »

Don't know. So far, no one has asked me what it means.
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« Reply #5 on: November 30, 2016, 04:35:34 AM »

Don't know. So far, no one has asked me what it means.
(clearing throat) So, what does it mean? Smiley

Neat idea. I was just wondering what their motivation is for fighting crime? Wouldn't the police—and anyone who does what the police do, like fighting crime—be their enemies? From your description, it sounds more like they're fighting corruption rather than crime, but maybe I'm misreading.
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« Reply #6 on: November 30, 2016, 09:32:39 AM »

Long ride: Nettie Ecklund, the Hoosier Huntress, and the eccentric bohemian, Euphoria Blanc, with their team of surprisingly talented soiled doves fight grabbers, slum lords, robber barons, and a mysterious cult in gilded age New York.

This is two lists and a date stamp. At least lead with "gilded age" to set the tone for what follows.
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