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Author Topic: I am Remarkable  (Read 2498 times)
« on: October 10, 2016, 07:37:21 AM »

Eighteen-year-old Jack Sheer knows Divine Madness is coming for him. Divine Madness, the devastating catatonia born of Jack’s schizophrenia disorder, has almost triumphed once, propelling Jack to complete isolation for days. With Divine Madness only temporarily restrained by the latest medicines, time is running out. Isolated in his apartment, Jack is fighting every day with the fear he’ll lose his connection with the reality at any moment.
But Jack’s life is changing when his friends, divide opinions on how to get Jack out of isolation.  Brogerd throw away his medicines, and, saying Jack is only bored, take him to a party where he meets Augustina. On a string of dates with Augustina, Jack realizes he somehow can’t emotionally connect to her.
Frightened by the disorder, he goes to his third friend Eric who is a believer in psychology. He convinces Jack to take his medicines and go to the psychiatrist every week, but fails to persuade him come out of his isolation. Meanwhile Augustina, who has fallen for him, tries to win his attention. She fails, as he’s too absorbed in himself. 
Jack is once again frightened when the psychiatrist asks him to go back home. He discusses the matter with his friend Eric, who accepts to tell the reason behind the psychiatrist’s suggestion if Jack agrees to go back to home. Jack agrees and Eric reveals to him that there is no cure for schizophrenia.
A hopeless Jack comes back to his friend Brogerd who tell him to go to a traditional healer. Jack finally resolves his angst when the healer tells him to start believing in himself. Meanwhile Augustina, who is planning something for Jack for her coming birthday party, is heartbroken when he tells him he’s going back home on the same day.
On farewell, Augustina sees him in her favorite coffee shop, where she has brought a bucket with a piece of her birthday cake. She gives it to him, asking to promise he’d return her bucket. But Jack refuses, saying he might never see her again.
He leaves for home as a dropout from college, but promises himself that he’ll one day become a remarkable person.  He also realizes that schizophrenia has taken his friends and someone’s offered love from him so far.
« Last Edit: October 10, 2016, 08:01:29 AM by avesthom » Logged

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« Reply #1 on: October 10, 2016, 02:09:11 PM »

Okay, this is much stronger than your query! The Divine Madness thing needs to be in your query, because it ups the stakes.

I'm not really sure I understand the ending. He comes to a realization about his schizophrenia, but does going home mean he comes out of isolation and triumphs over the Divine Madness, at least for now?

The middle section is a little weak, because it's just his friends suggesting one thing after another. I would try to mix the structure up a little in that section.
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