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Author Topic: Synopsis: Another Day  (Read 3711 times)

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« on: May 04, 2017, 07:50:14 PM »

The story begins with the introduction of Maggie followed by the introduction of Matthew and his cousin Ralph to contrast how all three see the same things differently. This leads to the first conflict of the book, the sexist nature of Matthew and Ralph contrasted to the neglect by Maggie's husband.

This sexism only grows worse as the fighting in Maggie's home turns violent. Her husband, Brian, eventually leaves her after a particularly violent night. Matthew and Ralph only serve to make things worse when she gets to class.
The first part of the book ends with Maggie meeting her future lover, Ashley, and beginning a lesbian relationship. Matthew determines that no one in class should have passed.

The second part of the book opens a year or so later with Maggie and Ashley at a restaurant with their children. This introduces the second conflict of the book, Maggie and her sister Sarah. Her sister is openly scheming to take away her children. Maggie tries to push the idea of moving in with Ashley but is refused. Maggie begins to realize Ashley will not commit to her.

Next, her ex-husband shows up to inform her that he lied about paying the mortgage on their house. He lets her know that she and her kids are about to be evicted all while flaunting his new girlfriend to her. Maggie moves in with her mom and sister. Once there, Ashley lies to her about a flat so she does not have to take Maggie's kid to school. This leads to Maggie not being able to take her kid to school and a fight breaks out between her and Sarah. Ultimately Maggie leaves Ashley. Days later, she see's someone familiar on the night shift at the nursing home she works at; Matthew. Desperate for someone to talk to, she talks him into buying her a coffee sometime in the future.

Matthew, on the other hand, just wants to sleep with Maggie. His intentions are straightforward and small.
The second part ends with Maggie getting into fight with Sarah, hitting her, then storming out. She then meets up with Matthew, they go back to his place and get drunk before ending up in bed together.

The third part opens with Maggie, now childless, getting stoned with two lesbian friends of hers. It's been close to a year into Maggie and Matthew being together and now she discovers she is pregnant. Matthew already realizes what she is about to tell him and decides he wants nothing to do with it. He buys some wormwood and begins mixing it in her consumables without her knowledge. She miscarries and, while trying to tell her mother of the miscarriage, gets into a fight again with her sister. This leads to her going to jail and Matthew telling her over the phone that he never needed her. He does not post her bail and she loses her job as well as her chance of getting her kids back.

The story ends years later with Matthew standing at the side of the grocery store he works at smoking a cigarette. He see's Maggie in the distance then, for a brief second, finally feels a pang of guilt for what he did. The last line being him hoping she finally found happiness.

"That's terrible." "No, that is the toppest of qualities!"
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« Reply #1 on: November 08, 2017, 09:56:57 PM »

Something I read in my research for synopsis help said instead of writing the story begins... Actually start with describing the opening scene. Your story sounds a little depressing but I usually stick to romance so it may just not be my thing. If Maggie does have some sort of happy ending you should put that in there. Does she overcome her problems and prosper?

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« Reply #2 on: November 27, 2017, 02:49:26 PM »

Your synopsis needs a ton of work. You're making big mistakes by telling the reader: "the story begins" and pretty much everything in the first paragraph.  A synopsis should demonstrate who the characters are and their specific conflicts as well as the story stakes.

There's another comment in this thread by Munley with a link to synopses you should read: http://www.writersdigest.com/editor-blogs/guide-to-literary-agents/synopsis-writing

I don't mean to be harsh, but go back to the drawing board and start over after you've read good synopses.
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