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Author Topic: To Live With Honor - memoir  (Read 540 times)
TimandHonor
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« on: December 01, 2017, 03:42:14 AM »



TO LIVE WITH HONOR is a 94,000-word literary memoir that will appeal to a generation of transitional military veterans, horse and animal lovers, and anyone enjoying inspirational true stories.
 
Through scars and folded stars, a haunted warrior and his crippled horse risk life and love to reforge the one word that binds them: Honor.
 
Honor. I swore I’d fight for it, swore I’d die for it. But I didn’t. My men charged into shadowed valleys like "The Sunni Triangle," the Korangal Valley, and Takur Ghar. All three hundred, eighty-seven of my men returned dead. I was an Honor Guard—a folder of flags. My men always came back dead. Yet, I lived. After the broken promises, after the betrayal of the word I was sworn to, I lived. When one carries the weight of the dead, it requires the strength of a horse to carry him.
 
Years later, fate dragged an unwilling man to a wretched livestock auction on the frayed edge of Oklahoma City. I brought pain to the auction, but left with something else. The filthy Thoroughbred colt, abandoned and left for slaughter, came with only one thing: a name, printed on wrinkled paper— “Honor.”
 
After a gruesome injury, the doctors said he would die. When he didn't, they warned that running would kill him. But a horse runs, regardless of scars, because he can. As every Guardsman knows, honor comes with death… but could Honor outrun the pale horse?

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« Reply #1 on: December 01, 2017, 08:00:28 AM »

I really know nothing AT ALL about memoirs, but I'm going to offer a few comments. If they're totally useless, just ignore them  Smiley

Your first line wold be considered a logline. Some people warn against them, but I really like yours. Using first person for a general query is a definite no-no, but I don't know if it's different for memoir. In the third paragraph, is "an unwilling man" the same character? I definitely think you shouldn't change the POV here. Maybe it would work to say "fate dragged this unwilling man..."

Sorry I don't have more to offer. I really have no experience here. confused
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« Reply #2 on: December 01, 2017, 10:19:29 AM »

Memoir queries as a rule of thumb are first person. You’re spot on with the person change. It reads more in line with what I want to say the way you mentioned, without altering person. Thanks!
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