Author Topic: for PIT2PUB 7/18 PB  (Read 1141 times)

Offline jpm327

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for PIT2PUB 7/18 PB
« on: July 17, 2018, 10:30:19 AM »
On a family’s mantle sit 8 nesting dolls. They are sisters and one is a little different from the rest. Lilly is the only one that doesn’t open. She discovers THE SURPRISE INSIDE. She is special too and the only one who can save the human family’s holiday surprise #PIT2PUB  #pb

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Re: for PIT2PUB 7/18 PB
« Reply #1 on: July 17, 2018, 12:09:57 PM »
Eight nesting dolls sit on a mantle, all sisters. One is different from the rest: Lilly doesn't open. She discovers THE SURPRISE INSIDE, that she is special too, the only one who can save the human family's holiday surprise #PIT2PUB #pb

I am terrible at this, so take my suggestions lightly. Is there some other word you could use at the end of the pitch besides surprise (which is already in the name of the book)?

Good luck!

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Re: for PIT2PUB 7/18 PB
« Reply #2 on: July 17, 2018, 12:13:07 PM »
Thank you! That’s great! Yes- I think I could use tradition maybe?