Congrats on finishing this historical fiction. I'm finishing my own Revolutionary War novel now. There's some changes i'd make for better flow. Queries are much harder than writing novels.
Willem Tadeujski has always done what he was told, a good soldier, doing his duty. This first sentence doesn't flow at all and give a bad first impression. I'd break it into two sentences. Willem Tadeujski has always done as he's told. He's a good soldier who strives to do his duty. Given a rare second chance to live and fight for the Germans during World War 2, he sees his chance to survive and eventually get gets home. This sentence confuses me. Is he only looking for a way to get home or is he gunning to fight? If it's the former, maybe say something like: Given a rare second chance to return to his homeland and the woman he loves, Willem risks everything. What Willem doesn't know is that his wife Elise has her own struggles...Keep this in Willem's POV, unless the story is told in two POV, in that case I'd mention it. living with When that second chance appears to run out, he quits the soldier life and tries to get home across war ravaged Europe to his wife and child in Nazi occupied Poland. Elise Tadeujski is doing the best she can in wartime Krakow, trying to care for her daughter Katerine, struggling to survive between the oppressive Nazi occupiers and those who would resist them. When Wil’s letters stop coming home, she must remain strong for the only family she has left in spite of the profound pressure to do something to help the war effort.. and resisting the awful temptation in the character of a tall handsome good hearted German who could be her only true hope.
I am pleased to present my first novel, The Good Soldier make sure the title is in italics, a 97,000 word work of historical or commercial fiction, the full manuscript of which, is available upon request. Dealing with themes of family, love, and what it means to choose between one’s duty and one’s heart, The Good Soldier is aimed at the adult reader who enjoys a mix of action, romance, and history in one story, but who also dives deep into questioning human conduct and arguably enjoys extended conversation. Don't love this. When you say your work is historical, the agent automatically knows who the audience is. Choosing between one's duty and heart also implies that this book is a conversation piece.
As a full time history teacher, I have specializedspecialize in and teach taught the World War II era history from military, social comma here and political history points of view, as well as teaching the Holocaust. I enjoy writing in my spare time and am currently working on my second novel as well as kicking around ideas for a third. A devoted husband and father of two, I enjoy reading history and fantasy, ice hockey, craft beer and whiskey. I'm a devoted father of two who enjoys ice hockey, craft beer, whiskey, and of course reading history and fantasy. totally nitpicking but the wording if off and makes it sound as if you enjoy reading whiskey.
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BTW, this is totally a story I'd read.