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Offline MsGretaGreen

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I’ve modified my synopsis. It is now 525 words

Like most writers, I’m finding the experience of writing queries and synopsis excruciating. I have left out so many important plot pieces, and still have a 545 word count document. I was hoping to be closer to 500.
Please let me know if there is anything you think I can omit, something that needs clarification, or something that is missing.
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     GARDEN OF EVE, A SEYCHELLES SAGA follows three generations of Creole women living on the tiny rustic island of La Digue during the 1800’s. 
CAMILLE, a reputed healer and free person of color, defies societal expectations by marrying a French pirate. When he dies, their teenaged daughter ADINE loses her introduction to the wealthy Grands Blancs. Camille wants to open doors for Adine who can pass for white, but her African heritage threatens her daughter’s acceptance. She decides against attending Adine’s debut, but regrets concealing her identity.
     Naive Adine delights in the romance of fancy gowns and dinner parties, while her mother worries about the men who pursue her: Camille’s secret beau of long ago, and a lustful foreigner with a disapproving father. When the foreigners’s father dies, Adine comforts him by giving of her body, and ends up pregnant and alone. Camille saves her daughter’s reputation by using a rare Chinese herb to orchestrate her miscarriage. Clueless Adine assumes God her savior. She rejects her mother’s gris-gris practice and dedicates herself to Catholicism.
     Decades later, and devout Adine obsesses over her daughter SERAPHINA’s virginity. Seraphina rebels and questions women’s subservient role as defined by Eve in Genesis. She worries her only purpose is to find a man and marry well. When a young deacon comes to La Digue, Seraphina is drawn to his angelic face and ecstatic passion but not his blind faith. They embark on a series of “Deadly Sin” debates, and the Deacon wrestles with his attraction to Seraphina’s mind and body. She assumes the Deacon unattainable and acts out her lust alone and on purpose to claim her virginity.
     When best friend JOSEPH proposes to Seraphina, she panics and flees into the Deacon’s arms. The Deacon compares Seraphina to the temptress Eve, and she realizes he is not the man of her fantasies. Before they part, a passerby catches them in a moment of undress, and  their indiscretion becomes public. Jealous Joseph agrees to meet with Seraphina and their pain leads to passion. But without blood proof of her virginity, he cannot trust her. Seraphina’s parents try to protect her from rumors by sending her to Mahe island.
     After six years of exile, Seraphina’s father and brother come to collect her. A sweet reunion ends in tragedy when the men perish in the Lavalas (avalanches)—Mahe’s worst natural disaster. Seraphina returns to Adine and deliver the news. She must manage her family’s coconut plantation and relies on Joseph’s instruction. They renew a romance, but faithless Seraphina refuses a church marriage—the only acceptable contract—and fights for independence. She wants to establish the first vanillery on her own, but realizes no joy in success without Joseph by her side. She agrees to a church wedding to satisfy Adine and loses her fear of motherhood.
     Seraphina suffers a difficult pregnancy. Camille uses the same Chinese herb which caused Adine’s abortion to induce Seraphina’s labor. After her granddaughter’s birth, Adine grapples with her discovery. She tells Seraphina about her first pregnancy, miscarriage, and Camille’s responsibility. A final confrontation between mothers and daughters dismantles long-held secrets and leads to forgiveness.
     GARDEN OF EVE, A SEYCHELLES SAGA is about three women’s quests to live their truths, and how they risk failure by keeping secrets.
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Re: GARDEN OF EVE, A SEYCHELLES SAGA *historical fiction* synopsis
« Reply #1 on: April 29, 2019, 06:44:10 AM »
Here is my updated version:

     GARDEN OF EVE, A SEYCHELLES SAGA follows three generations of Creole women living on the tiny rustic island of La Digue during the British colonial 1800s. 
     
     CAMILLE, a reputed healer and free person of color, defies societal expectations by marrying a white, French pirate. When he dies, their teenaged daughter ADINE loses an introduction to the wealthy Grands Blancs. Camille wants to open doors for Adine who can pass for white, but her own African heritage threatens her daughter’s acceptance. She decides against attending Adine’s debut, but regrets concealing her identity.

     Naïve Adine delights in romance, fancy gowns, and dinner parties, while her mother worries about the men who pursue her: Camille’s secret beau of long ago, and a lustful foreigner with a disapproving father. When the foreigners’s father dies, Adine comforts him by giving of her body, and ends up pregnant and alone. Camille saves her daughter’s reputation by using a rare Chinese herb to orchestrate her miscarriage. Clueless Adine assumes God her savior. She rejects her mother’s gris-gris practice and dedicates herself to Catholicism.

     Decades later, the now devout Adine obsesses over her own daughter SERAPHINA’s virginity. Seraphina rebels and questions women’s subservient role as defined by Eve in Genesis. She worries her only purpose is to find a man and marry well. When a young deacon comes to La Digue, Seraphina is drawn to his angelic face and ecstatic passion but not his blind faith. They embark on a series of “Deadly Sin” debates, and the Deacon wrestles with his attraction to Seraphina’s mind and body.

     When best friend JOSEPH proposes to Seraphina, she panics and flees into the Deacon’s arms. The Deacon compares Seraphina to the temptress Eve, and she realizes he is not the man of her fantasies. Before they part, a passerby catches them in a moment of undress, and their indiscretion becomes public. Jealous Joseph agrees to meet with Seraphina. Their pain leads to passion, but ultimately, he does not trust her. Seraphina’s parents protect her from rumors by sending her to Mahe island.

     After six years of exile, Seraphina’s father and brother come to collect her. A sweet reunion ends in tragedy when the men perish in the Lavalas (avalanches): Mahe’s worst natural disaster. Seraphina returns to La Digue to care for her distraught mother and manage their family’s coconut plantation. She relies on Joseph’s instruction, and they renew their romance. But faithless Seraphina refuses a church marriage—the only acceptable contract—and fights for independence. She wants to establish the first vanillery on her own, but experiences no joy in success without Joseph by her side. She agrees to a church wedding to satisfy Adine and loses her fear of motherhood.

     Seraphina suffers a difficult pregnancy. Camille uses the same Chinese herb which caused Adine’s abortion to induce Seraphina’s labor. Shocked Adine recognizes Camille’s role in her miscarriage. Hidden truths bubble up and demand a reckoning. A final confrontation between mothers and daughters dismantles long-held secrets and clears the way to understanding and forgiveness.

     GARDEN OF EVE, A SEYCHELLES SAGA explores three women’s quests to live their truths, and how they risk failure by keeping secrets.