Author Topic: Ya fantasy - Lionheart  (Read 605 times)

Offline Sudhanshu

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Ya fantasy - Lionheart
« on: August 08, 2019, 10:58:45 AM »
It is my first attempt. Please review!!

A reckless teenager discovers that he is the last blood of a fallen warrior civilization and his heart holds an ancient stone with limitless powers.

Offline Sir Nessun Dorma

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Re: Ya fantasy - Lionheart
« Reply #1 on: August 12, 2019, 09:27:16 PM »
Correct me if I am being too literal minded, but how can his heart hold anything except blood, much less a stone?  Am I reading this incorrectly?  But a stone with limitless powers sounds interesting.  Limitless powers sounds too broad.  Are these powers of the mind--telekinesis or mind reading for example?  Or does the stone confer super powers such as flying, exceptional strength, or invulnerability?  Or does it refer to something else?  This is a point which may need clearing up.