Author Topic: Psychological Thriller  (Read 226 times)

Offline AllisonAWritings

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Psychological Thriller
« on: June 23, 2020, 01:27:21 PM »
           His face is unnatural--gaunt and twisted in a way it wasn’t when he was alive. I know enough by now to say this with certainty.
           His decaying gray skin hangs from his claw-shaped hands, looking as if they want to grab me, but not just yet. Only a small pebble of light flickers from his dark, sunken eyes glaring from the corner of the living room where he’s crouched.

Offline rivergirl

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Re: Psychological Thriller
« Reply #1 on: August 16, 2020, 07:03:49 PM »
Very engaging. I'd keep reading just for more explanation! I'd fix two sentences in a row however starting with "his", however.