Hey all! My CP and I have reworked this query several times, but I'm hoping to get some feedback on it from readers who are unfamiliar with my book. This is just the story part of the query since I feel more confident about my bio and metadata sections. Any feedback is appreciated! Thank you!
Dear Awesome Agent,
Ever since she saw her first ghost, twelve-year-old Riley Gates has been obsessed with the supernatural. She earns her allowance hiding in Savannah cemeteries, scaring tourists for her parents’ walking tour, and her idol is the host of Paranormal Pioneers, a ghost-hunting show with depressingly low ratings.
Living in the most haunted city in America even makes her lack of friends bearable—after all, a friend would just get in the way of her paranormal investigations, because no one can creep through headstones as stealthily as Riley. But then her parents reveal shocking news: the ghost tour is going under and their family will be moving to Michigan. No one seems to care that Riley’s world is collapsing around her, not her parents or her classmates, and certainly not her ex-best friend turned nemesis, Sarah Clarke.
When it’s revealed that Paranormal Pioneers will be hosting a ghost-hunting tournament in her hometown of Savannah, it looks like all of Riley’s prayers have been answered. Not only does she have it in the bag (after all, she eats, sleeps, and breathes ghosts), but there’s a twenty-five thousand dollar grand prize. The catch? Everyone must compete in teams of two, and the only kid in her class not partnered up is Sarah. If Riley can’t swallow her pride, she’ll be forced to miss out on competing altogether.
Riley and Sarah call a reluctant truce, but as the competition heats up, Riley can’t shake the feeling that Sarah is keeping a secret from her—something that could cause them to lose the tournament… Or their lives.