Author Topic: YA Paranormal Romance  (Read 76 times)

Offline roseydreamerx

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YA Paranormal Romance
« on: September 16, 2021, 07:18:49 PM »
Hello! Looking for some feedback on my wip. Feel free to give criticism. I'm relatively young and looking to learn from those more experienced.

"There was a man following me. Lights shone in every direction on the busy London street, people and cars breezing by in the chill night air. All the bustle made it hard to focus, but I was certain that the figure in a long grey coat had been behind me for three blocks now. I clutched my plastic take-out bag tighter, though I doubted someone dressed that nicely was after my honey chicken."

Offline rivergirl

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Re: YA Paranormal Romance
« Reply #1 on: September 18, 2021, 03:24:20 PM »
This is great. My only critique is that trench-coats aren’t particularly nice and if he’s behind her is she really getting that great of a look at him?