Good luck with this year's submission. Love the concept of a cyborg feline. I think the sample needs tightening. Made some suggestions - which may or may not be helpful.
"Greetings and salutations Mouser 3141926, another glorious galactic-standard day has begun with Halcyon-Lux Cruise Lines," said a softly spoken female-like (why not "feminine voice"? The unusual opening risks being eclipsed by overwriting) "Please proceed to cubicle 357 for your daily assignment." (My interest is piqued...I'm already curious)
I opened my eyes, my vision adjusted dispite (sp. "despite) constant the constant flicker and buzzing of the florescent lighting. )This is clunky. Can you tighten? For example:"I cracked open my eyes, and despite the flicker and buzzing of florescent lighting, my vision adjusted. Somewhere in the back of my positronic-brain, (had to google, so thank you for a new word!)) a distance voice that was just beyond the horizon called to me. Before I could analyze this any further, my limiter chip reminded me that my brothers and sisters were waiting for me for our daily affirmation. (interesting.)
