Noah Beit-Aharon (hanasich_halavan on QT) has signed with agent Evan Gregory of Ethan Ellenberg Literary Agency.
Any agents that rejected me based on formatting really didn't do me any favors, because I never once received a note explaining that this (or anything else, for that matter) was why my MS had been rejected. Yes, this includes the three agents (other than Evan) who asked for full or partial submissions, and it also includes at least two agents whose websites and blogs promised outright that all rejected submissions would receive some commentary.
Dear [Mr. or Ms. ___],
Prince Eran is running out of time. His father is dying, the king's advisers want him out of the way, and he's pretty sure his own bodyguard may turn on him at any moment. He barely even has the loyalty of the troops, whose ranks are split into regional factions. Without anyone trustworthy on his side, Eran's imminent kingship is liable to be very short lived.
Then into the capital falls Devec, a young soldier cursed with a complete inability to lie or break a promise. In a city that runs on deceit, here finally is a man who cannot help but tell the truth. The prince has found someone he can trust -- but can Devec trust the prince? Dangerous games are being played above Devec's head, and he will be forced to choose between his loyalty to king and country, and his desire to do what is right.
A tale of magic, honor and conspiracy, The Kingmakers should appeal to readers of George R. R. Martin's A Song of Ice and Fire series. It is my first novel, complete at 83,000 words.
As per your agency's guidelines, I am including a synopsis and the first 10 pages as attachments. Thank you for your time.